Mrmilkcarton's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[A Perfected Reality [WIP]]

I like where this is going

Sounding good so far. The melody is superb and the mix sounds good too. You'll have to give me a message when the full song is out so I can properly review it.

Cheers and congrats on top 5 spot.

LiquidEvolution responds:

Thanks man :)! Miles Away was sick by the way!

[Generic HardTrance v10]

Thats alot of bass

That kick has a huge tail to it lol. Sounded good till a few more elements were brought in and then the mix got a little crowded in the low end. Your kick sounds fine but I can't seem to figure out what the bass is doing.

As far as structure goes it sounds great I personally liked it but the bass end in my headphones took over and I couldn't hear as much as I could. Maybe a sidechain on the Bass could help clean up the low end. Even using an EQ to give independent frequencies to the bass and Kick could help it out some.

Anyway you has my 5s.

Teck071 responds:

I totally agree, the bass is damn fucked...

dont know how to fix it

[Love, As I Know It (MAC9)]

Always room to improve

"A raw piano love song for a girl at my school. but no-one at school knows I compose :p
meh, she'll never know"

I was exactly like that at my high school till last year. I decided to tell one of my friends. Just ONE and now half the school knows I make music. :-/ Was just at a soccer game today and a guy I know asked about my music. Was kinda funny cause I never mentioned anything to him about it.

Anyways enough ranting for the song. I'm a fan of reverb so I say give the piano more reverb to seem like it's floating. Maybe even a new piano sample could help you out :P .

As for the feeling of the song it's nice but a touch melancholy. I figure love is a mix of emotions but you stick with one which is aight. At 1:13 you switch to descending arpeggios which almost changes the mood and image of the song. It seems like it doesn't feel fit with the song, it almost reminds me of the Final fantasy series of music. Just try to stick with one idea when making a song like this and always keep dynamics in mind.

Cheers.

Zero123Music responds:

hmm, yes - thankyou.

a very helpful review.

1. Reverb - I'm gonna put a reverb bus in and some instruments - like strings.

2. I just thought of the descending arpeggios and thought it was kinda different,
but if there is anything anyone doesn't like - I'll cut it^^

3. I totally forgot about dynamics - so thankyou. (but this was recorded - so dynamics seem natural when I'm playing. but of course a keyboard is not the same as a nice piano)

The reason i uploaded so early is because I thought the MAC9 deadline was on that nite :-/ I was wrong lol.

thanks alot - and this has been really helpful.
>>Zero123Music

[The Apprentice]

Catchy

It's a catchy song but not very ambitious when it comes to peaking or creating a sense of energy. There seems to be a lack of drums and it seems a snare and open hihat are all you have. More percussion could remedy some of the emptiness of the drum section

I'm no genius when it comes to Techno but I'm sure a bass could of help pump up along with giving it a more defined beat. The transition to the new melody is nice but in order to get rid of a sound of repetition try to add new elements or filter instruments to give an idea of change. A bass line can change the sound of a melody dramatically and give the song a whole new feel.

As far as synthes go your pad stays filterd and almost overpowers part of the mix. Pads tend to be a part of the atmosphere when I make a song so I try to keep them lower volume then the lead.

So my tip to make a song less repetitive and to get less reviews that point it out is just to add little things that seem to make the song sound different rather then change the melody completely. Electronic songs tend to be repetitive but they keep you interested by adding new elements which can vary from synthes, Fx, Drums, etc.

Cheers.

[I've Forgotten]

Sounds like a sytrus saw

So you have a good intro to the song but the pad sounds really dry to begin with. Some EQ could brighten it up a little. The intro is a little long and not so progressive so it kinda eats away at the users attention span. When it finally does hit you got my attention. Try to avoid 30 seconds of the same synthe even if it is a melody it just doesn't have the dynamics needed to keep people's attention.

I was a little caught off guard by the reverb clap in the beginning with the kick it didn't fit until later in the song it wasn't as over powering. Not really much to say about the drum patterns though other then that (not exactly my strong point in music).

Through out the song it's just constant energy and no melody really sticks out to me. Really feels like a synthe shredding song. For games I'm sure it really doesn't make a difference but a song with a strong melody can keep users coming back and looking for more. A break can sometimes make the main melody obvious saying "Hey right here this is what you should remember from this song". It's just my opinion though. A song can be made anyway you want it to be I know I've had my fair share of songs that didn't follow any set path.

For the mix overall try to make sure not to over crowd frequencies and cause chaos. More is not always better, sometimes less can make something more pleasing to the ear.

Best of luck with future songs even though this is an old track it's still good.

Stargame responds:

My point EXACTLY. This is an OLD SONG. Yes, it has a long intro. That's the worst thing about it, imo. Yes, it doesn't have a huge main melody. This one is meant for RAVES, not video games.

[xKore - Speechless]

Make Moar!

Man you always do things perfectly when you try them dude. You gotta tell me more often when you add new songs.

Is there more then a club mix might I ask? Cause I wantz moar.

Cheers mate keep it up.

xKore responds:

thanks milkimannnnnnn!11111111111111

naw the club mix is shitttttt, this is just the good bit i think, without dj intro and outro and stuff to save space so it can be higher quality.

[The Meaning of love?]

FX on yo voice

I'm not sure what you're trying to imply about my breasts.
You could sing I'm sure but try some effects and the like on your voice to boost it's quality,

YOU COULD BE THE NEXT KANYE!

Druids-Warcry responds:

indeed i am... now clean my floor!

thanks for the review

[Kazmo - Still Alive RMX [WIP]]

A Work in Progress

So when I listen to remixes I hope they improve some form of the song. While you did some justice there is nothing stands out.

I'll start off with your synthes. You have an Arp in a cutoff filter doing the same thing for 2 minutes. It's really kind of bland and if you listen to the original song there is much more energy being brought forth in the build with the lyrics and drums. I know Trance is about big build ups but yours just didn't live up to it. Of course there is the remixes done by popular artists already for the OST so you have a large gap to cover to go above and beyond the original.

Your drums samples sound like Vengeance samples. The reverb kick you use I'm sure of that. Really there aren't many elements to this song. You use about 3 or 4 synthes it's seems but that's fine.

As good of a singer Lira is she didn't hit/live up to the originals vocals. The vocals at some points were to quiet and just struck little emotion. The vocals are close but they don't have the right amount of emotion.

Just because you have vocals doesn't mean you have to be simple with your song. Honestly nothing shines in this piece. The pianos nice but just mimics the original usually. The synthes doing it's arp thing which is stereotypical of trance and all around kind of annoying sometimes. If you removed the vocals from this song it wouldn't stand on its own as a great trance song.

I suggest rethinking some of the points in this song. (Sorry I'm taking music theory so I have to critique songs) You have a very bland transition and peak to the song. Try to make it more unique, quality isn't everything.

Sorry if I was a little harsh but you do have 2 songs on the top 5 so don't get cocky.

[.HLS. Winter Wonderland]

Few mistakes.

Well you have alot of things I like and there really isnt much I don't like.

I'll start off with the FL Keys, I went over it a little but I'll go a little deeper this time. In my mind a Piano isn't a fast melodic instrument when it comes to Trance. (Forget Happy hardcore Piano for now) So if you ask me you could put delay and reverb on a piano and then have hit the higher notes fewer times creating more atmosphere. As it stands right now it seems more like a back up instrument to your synthes.

As you go on your drums enter but never really change. The kick could use some EQing and the clap is fine for now. Some more percussion couldn't hurt though. Open hihats or closed hihats its all good.

Melodic progression was interesting, I didn't excpect it to augment like it did. Some of the transitions were a bit fast along with with the build to it. Overall not much I have to say about the melody.

It needs some work but its good practice.

heartless1298 responds:

Thanks! About the the hi-hats part, I was going to add them, but I don't know why I didn't. I will take all your advice into consideration, because I need it.

Again, thanks for the review!

[BeeT - Hold On!]

Review

Aight so lets get down to business.

Start off with a happy sound and move on from there to build off it. As far as EQing and the sound of the synthe I'm sure Karco went over that. I'm not a very technical guy but I review by what I hear next in my head. If you do what I hear then your in heading the right direction.

At about 56 seconds you let me down man. :( I was honesty hoping for high energy peak for the first half of the song. You had the build but not the release I was looking for.

Well we continue on from there and don't have too much variation till about half way mark of the song. Your drums don't seem to change much. As it is common in Trance to have pretty basic patterns I'm sure you could of livened them up and made them a bit more complex. It might help to add more body to the song.

It's missing a few elements to be outstanding. A few pads to add to the frequency range could of helped. A song you can feel through out you is a great way to know if your making a good song.

The overall structure could use some work to make builds and peaks apparent. You used transition VeC samples that usually go to a higher energy but you used them to transition to lower energy at parts. While its a good idea its miss leading in some cases.

Overall your getting better but still need to work on the sound and structure.